tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post113956918247110116..comments2024-03-21T05:10:57.134+00:00Comments on Mustard Seed Shavings: The Noise of ArtSteve Tilleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17400505989949096631noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139937430638379182006-02-14T17:17:00.000+00:002006-02-14T17:17:00.000+00:00Probably not very helpful, but your post did make ...Probably not very helpful, but your post did make me want to know what happened next...Kathrynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09171138485811816831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139824568823609822006-02-13T09:56:00.000+00:002006-02-13T09:56:00.000+00:00UK producers are far less fussy about what you sen...UK producers are far less fussy about what you send them. I emailed my Hollywood agent an synopsis once, leaving the last 3rd of the story as a cliff-hanger, thinking this would hook him into reading it. He wrote back saying that for some reason some paragraphs had got lost on their way and that I should check to see if there was a ISP problem. I sent him the last two paragraphs, saying I didn't know what had happened to them.<BR/><BR/>I still don't know if he was being sarcastic.Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13905592870063005287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139653458821378652006-02-11T10:24:00.000+00:002006-02-11T10:24:00.000+00:00Thanks again Simon. Will think about what you say....Thanks again Simon. Will think about what you say. Only reason for not changing it at once is that I've never met a screen writer yet who didn't think he or she couldn't do it better. And this 'synopsis' has already persuaded several people to read the treatment without a personal pitch.Steve Tilleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17400505989949096631noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139652648659941122006-02-11T10:10:00.000+00:002006-02-11T10:10:00.000+00:00I hate formulas. I just hate them. But all "origin...I hate formulas. I just hate them. But all "original" films use the old devices, they just update them and give them a new twist. Unless your making an arthouse film, in which case you can throw away the rules and nobody will watch your film (they dont care because they get government funding).<BR/><BR/>If your characters are in this together, in a road movie way - Thelma and Louise, Sideways etc - I think you should set them up together.<BR/><BR/>Editor of failing Christian magazine, Robin, and mature art student, Dan, tour the country in a borrowed van with Dan's new project...<BR/><BR/>Sort of thing.<BR/><BR/>...But their journey is thrown into turmoil when the van crashes into a curry house, forcing them to confront... (?)<BR/><BR/>What you've written isn't a synopisis. It's more of a long-winded logline. A synopsis should present the whole story in shortened form - ie the beginning middle and end.Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13905592870063005287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139588618530303132006-02-10T16:23:00.000+00:002006-02-10T16:23:00.000+00:00Jon, I'd be happy to let your friend see treatment...Jon, I'd be happy to let your friend see treatment or script if he wanted to.<BR/><BR/>Simon I know you are a screen-writer. I read your blog see. That was one of the reasons I put the synopsis on mine. Red rag ... Bull. Join dots.<BR/><BR/>I love the fact that to get someone to read a screen play you have to show how it is the same as every one that has even been made (one protagonist, one antagonist, up the stakes, protagonist must change and develop, three acts, all characters in first ten minutes, other rules) and then how it is differnt to every one that has ever been made and not just another love story etc.<BR/><BR/>How come so many Hollywood movies are the same then?<BR/><BR/>I've decided that I care more about keeping it together than getting it made but will look at the synopsis again as it may not sell the thing that well; the treatment is better I think. Thanks for the advice.<BR/><BR/>In summary it's a comedy road love story about art and theology. The Cannonball Run meets Dogma.<BR/><BR/>It isn't evangelistic and no-one gets converted. God gets a little bit mocked. You'd like that.Steve Tilleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17400505989949096631noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139585503412554712006-02-10T15:31:00.000+00:002006-02-10T15:31:00.000+00:00I've a friend who's trying to "make it" in filming...I've a friend who's trying to "make it" in filming - has made several films, works for a film company (I think - or similar such thing), would like to branch out, Christian etc. Certainly not high-profile (yet...) and you may not be interested for that reason. But if you are, drop me an email and I'll send you details - I have a copy of a film he's already done, too, if you want...Jonathan Pottshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01629076544085968474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5581050.post-1139579487301666122006-02-10T13:51:00.000+00:002006-02-10T13:51:00.000+00:00Guess what... I've been a screenwriter for 10 year...Guess what... I've been a screenwriter for 10 years.<BR/><BR/>I think you've got 2 main characters when you only need 1. (it's a bit like you and God when you only really need you - haha! see how I slipped that one in?!)<BR/><BR/>It's difficult to see what his being a failing Christian has to do with the art installation in your story. The dots don't join up.<BR/><BR/>I think the last line is too throw-away. It leaves me with the feeling that this is just another run-of-the-mill story where a guy falls in love, learns something and moves on.<BR/><BR/>I'm not saying it is, it's just that's how you've made it come across in the outline.<BR/><BR/>If I meet anyone who's into this type of story (not sure what type it is???) I'll let you know.Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13905592870063005287noreply@blogger.com